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My shirt has to be stylish
My jeans have to be tight
I can't leave the house
Unless my makeup looks just right

My hair must be sleek
My shoes have to shine
But when I look into the mirror
I see I've become my own Frankenstein

My shirts used to be stained
My jeans used to be too big
My mom would always complain
That I left the house looking like a pig

My hair was always the same
My shoes dirty and untied
My face in the mirror showed
That beauty was what I was denied

Now I have lots of friends
Teachers adore what I say
I can't walk down the hall
Without getting a "hello" or a "hey"

Friends are jealous of my boyfriend
Because they all know he's fine
Except when I look into his eyes
I know I'm my own Frankenstein

I used to have a few friends
And teachers would stare me down
I would walk alone down the hall
Hiding a sad and pitiful frown

No one was jealous
I had nothing that they'd need
Because everyone knew
The small people followed their lead

One day I will find
That beauty is to be kind
And the one thing that I need
Is for my soul to be freed
And everything that's not mine
Has made me into this Frankenstein
©2006-2009 ~BakaDork
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Author's Comments

This poem really isn't that good...the rhyming is forced and all that junk. Im reading Frankenstein by Mary Shelly in school and I just kind of liked the idea of it. I definitly do not feel like this though. The whole first parts..the Frankenstein side, is not me...the whole dirty sloppy thing is me =D lol much to my mother's dismay. So yeah i was considering putting this under scraps but I wasn't sure so yeah...bleh

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:iconexistinmind:
oh my gosh.....I love it!!!! see you are better than me....I have one word for you "FAV" love ya!

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:icongloomy-optimist:
Nice concept. The idea behind it is rather universal, but you still managed to be original addressing it. :D

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:iconbakadork:
lol for one...I AM NOT BETTER THAN YOU and for two i have one word for YOU...thanks ;) :heart:

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Think like a genius, act like a fool.

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:iconbakadork:
lol yeah i promise im not like that though lol thanks!

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Think like a genius, act like a fool.

Save Darfur!!!
:iconbakadork:
no trust!! no trust at all...*glare*

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Think like a genius, act like a fool.

Save Darfur!!!
:iconbananasunshine77:
Okay, so the rhyming is forced. The concept is still really cool and you know as well as I, that rhyming can be fixed by tweaking the rhythm of some of the lines.

This is a really nice piece, CJ. Just look over some of where you lose you fluency and consider different ways to say what you want to say in that line. Let me know if you want/need/care for help.

:frail:

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:iconbakadork:
once i get all of this stress and blah off of me...i'll try and see what i did wrong...right now im just pooped

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Think like a genius, act like a fool.

Save Darfur!!!
:iconbananasunshine77:
Oh, believe me, I know the feeling.

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